»
Archives
»
Teen Poetry #7
»
the past
| Teen Poetry #7 |
|
the past |
|
|
Toasty Member
since 2003-06-09
Posts 74my little hole in wisconsin |
hello again. I wrote this after learning some things about my family's past- it's a tough subject for me, and it's hard to put into words, but I tried... Shadows of the past leaving me with doubt wanting to move on yearning to shout to leave it behind from whence it came sometimes I even hate his name scarred with something I didn't see hating these memories that aren't from me "Nothing is so strong as gentleness; Nothing so gentle as real strength." -Francis de Sales. |
||
| © Copyright 2004 Patricia Clark - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
muchos Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 102 |
i like your post, i dont know what to say, in a few parts you could have used a few more words, like on your first stanze, 'wanting to shout out' i dont if you have the same count or beat in every other line it makes the poem flow really well. but i like this poem a lot, and its good to let those feelings out, keep up the good work!! |
||
*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
sigh...family problems I hear you there, the past is something that often comes back to haunt my family no matter how hard we try to run from it. I know it is hard to write about something that meaningful to you but perhaps writing about it will help you, it helps me! All in all I enjoyed the poem, nicely done. ~Live and Laugh~ Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
