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Underneath Her Sunday Best
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Underneath Her Sunday Best |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I see her stand in ecstacy eyes closed swaying-sing! The Bible now an offering of proof that she is saved. Hug the neighbor to the left initiate of One True Way cluck of tongue and nod of head "ain't it just the truth?" she bleeds from her palms and on her feet stigmata in her glory dreams friends and family are amazed dropping worshipful to knees wanting just to touch the hem of her Sunday dress... gimme-gimme-what-you-got A Times Square audience attests "surely she's the favored child" murmered confirmation--"blessed"-- as enemies concede regret begging for forgiveness now from her magnifigence... she smiles she whispers to attendants, low: "Bring to me their heads-- on a silver platter please, make sure all the others know what can happen to the dross I want examples, all to see-- the path to God is in my keep. I am the keeper of the keys-- I am that I am" claimed she. "By the grace of God of course," disclaimed oh-so-hastily by codicil of policy a matter of convenience... served up Sundays with the brunch of the bread and wine. she prays searching her hands for a sign a miracle within the lines crosses intersperse the hand a pentagram and satan's grip "omens" chant the charlatan, and not one drop of martyred blood. "pour another offering" a lubricant for suffering the commons of humanity-- prayers first that she might see, then a plea for blind reprieve, promise-promise anything-- even lies will do. she laughs, pours herself another glass thinking, "I am saved." |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
WOW im speachless wow wow this is strong,intense, and fits right in the spots i like.... wow |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
What to say to that? I guess if you are going to save me, save me with wine! Jason |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Whew! What just flew over my head? This was incredibly thought provoking!!! I will remember this one for a long time, Serenity Blaze. em... wow...what to say? |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
my god Karen... you're an absolute legend. Have I told you lately how gorgeous you are? God I love your work. IWICWLU. M  Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
WOW |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Yay! Oh my gosh, some of my Catholic church-going friends would just love this, sweet friend, the image of such a special young woman or girl standing up there in her Sunday dress singing the kyrie is always such a glorious sight! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Wow! |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Extremely powerful writing here. I enjoyed it greatly. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Now that was certainly looking underneath Sunday Best at its very best. A Times Square audience attests "surely she's the favored child" murmered confirmation--"blessed"-- as enemies concede regret begging for forgiveness now from her magnifigence... she smiles This you nailed to perfection Serene One, "pour another offering" a lubricant for suffering the commons of humanity-- prayers first that she might see, then a plea for blind reprieve, promise-promise anything-- even lies will do. she laughs, pours herself another glass I do believe that is definitely the fuel that fires the hell within that Sunday's child. You inspire me, teach me, bless me, and still every day you show me a new side of you that truly confirms you are indeed one blessed with that pen! Awesome, and Blessed Be! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Karen?... I think you just gave birth with this one... smile... just...wow... you amaze me, lady... Love this and love YOU...   "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Smiling with you. What Vicky said...you birthed this one. Instead of asking for the multitudes heads, however, I think I would ask for their wallets...somehow, I think they'd feel the seat of the problem a little better if you'd remove some of the fat. Y'know? |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
you do have a way with words, just sitting in the background experiencing from afar. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I've always said that "wow" was my favorite reply to receive--because it's exactly the reaction I hope for. Thank you all for the replies--it felt good to write again after wrestling with a pretty bad bout of writer's block. (and gawd, yes, I love this place) |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wow!!!!! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Wow. *G* Now you know I'm not going to be that succinct! LOL So.... Yowser! You sucked me right into this one so that I wasn't just reading... I was feeling it. Excellent write! |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
I echo, "wow!" powerful, indicting, poignant, edgy, dark, thought-provoking...take your pick...all of the above, I think. my favorite phrase in a oh so haunting write: "lubricant for suffering" awesome...in its original meaning (not the flippant use of modern speakers) |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Oh good lord... I can't say "Wow" now!!! dang it.. How about, "Oh my gosh!!" lol love ya lady!"sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
...WOW... |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
You know I had to come and see this finished *smile* "ain't it just the truth?" she bleeds from her palms this transition alone speaks volumes K and here: begging for forgiveness now from her magnifigence... she smiles she whispers to attendants, low: "Bring to me their heads-- and here: served up Sundays with the brunch of the bread and wine. she prays searching her hands for a sign a miracle within the lines crosses intersperse the hand Your transitions alone tell the entire story here Karen and you have managed to show her pain, her confusion, her plea and their similarities. This is something I wish I had written. It's astounding. |
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