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1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2004-04-04 11:16 AM

Awakening

I am not content
in the waiting

I hunger for
so much more
patience is not
a silken word
eaten eloquently
my lips were
teased with touch
feathery electricity
awakening something
deeply forgotten
and with that taste
rescued from dust
hours I have
spent in hesitation
leaving me paused
stopped in the holding
on a lingering edge
but there are needs
that tear at me
and my heart
must move to follow
a sweeter craving
of this appetite

"i wish your room had room for two" John Mayer

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2004-04-04 11:19 AM

Very beautiful this awakening, so perfectly well expressed.
Love, Margherita

Grover
Senior Member

since 2004-01-27

Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada

2 posted 2004-04-04 11:30 AM

Eloquent.

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

3 posted 2004-04-04 12:35 PM

Sweets can get you in trouble, my sweet

DavePage
Member Elite

since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

4 posted 2004-04-04 12:39 PM

Like it

Dave

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

5 posted 2004-04-04 12:59 PM

superbly written...i truly understand

oh, my, and the agony of an awakening that must return to slumber, is profound

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

6 posted 2004-04-04 01:08 PM

"patience is not
a silken word
eaten eloquently"

Love these lines Helen...

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2004-04-04 01:27 PM

I know of those needs

sigh

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

8 posted 2004-04-04 04:53 PM

and my heart
must move to follow
a sweeter craving
of this appetite

Lovely...very lovely

Maree.

Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

bslicker

Member Elite

since 2000-12-04

Posts 2321
state of mind

9 posted 2004-04-04 09:31 PM

bernie

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

majnu

Senior Member

since 2002-10-13

Posts 1088
SF Bay Area

10 posted 2004-04-06 03:22 AM

kryptonite.

i find it funny that you quote a sod such as mayer; he should be quoting you.

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

Kicking Kim
Member

since 2001-04-16

Posts 426
Cloud Cucko Land!

11 posted 2004-04-06 07:44 AM

"but there are needs
that tear at me
and my heart"

You express feelings so well in your poetry.
I really enjoyed this and it was
extremely well written!!

^*~Kimberley~*^

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

12 posted 2004-04-06 09:59 AM

Now this is something I completely understand! Well done!

And Helen? How goes the training?

I want to hear all about the gun shoots...the unarmed self defense...tell..tell..tell!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

jellybeans
Member Elite

since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

13 posted 2004-04-06 10:30 AM

beautiful...beautiful......I have finally learned to be the beginning of your poem, I find we always 'wait', so the condition of my wait considers heavily on the curve of my lips
very creative write

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

14 posted 2004-04-06 10:56 AM

nice

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