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Remember The Tulips
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Remember The Tulips |
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Kie Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 77USA |
Remember The Tulips I’m waiting for the tulips To come again in spring I long to touch, their petals To bring you back to me I see their many colored hues Unfolding in my mind It floods my heart with memories Your face is so defined I see you in the tulip bed The sun behind your hair You looked just like an angel As I smiled and stared I hear your voice, call to me So soft, I lean to hear You speak to me of tulips Of romance planted there I loved to touch the flowers Those you handled with such care When I’d bend to kiss them You’d softly touch my hair Now each spring When tulips bloom I sit beside the bed I stare at all the colors Until I find your hue I softly kiss the petals side Whispering, “I remember you” |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
quite full of melancholy here, but also of beauty wonderful piece |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
just had to add a little . . . with skirts of many colors dancing in the breeze the tulip bed reminds me with you I was so pleased |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Woohoo! Love this piece. Bravo! Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kie~ Firstly, let me welcome you to PiP~ This is a lovely penning ... replete with vivid imagery~ Lovely~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Very romantic! |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
The colors are rich and vibrant... Enjoyed. TD |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ahhh just beautiful! Hugs~ ~ At the touch of love |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
I never thought of a tulip as a romantic flower, but after this poem I do. Will I have a romantic day tomorrow! We have so many tulips over here! Well done!  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Absolutely gorgeous. I love tulips and I have just written a little poem tonight where they play also a significant role. Welcome to Passions. Love, Margherita |
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ParisGrl Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610 |
Kie, This is beautiful. I love tulips too. Great Write, ~Laura~ |
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Amara Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 158East of the moon, west of the sun. |
You've replied to so many of mine, time to reply to yours, love! Beautiful and sweet, and the beats are perfect- well, except for the last line, which needs a tiny tweak. Would you consider changing it to 'And whisper "I remember you"'? See, it changes where the first stress falls, and helps the flow. In most of your lines, if not all, the first stress falls on the second syllable. The last line drawws the stress to the first one, so if you rearrange it like so, the beats will fall properly! But please, it's beautiful either way, and it's your work, do with it as you please.  I'll think of tulips differently, now! Which reminds me- good job in picking a flower other than 'roses', or other overdone 'love flowers'. Very fresh, and sweet. (Not that roses aren't lovely!)Light keep you always, Amara May light keep you, faith guide you, and love and laughter always find you. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
   (does happy flower dance) Awwwwwwwww, I love tulips sooooooo much as they are flowers of happiness to me, sweet friend, paintbrushes of springs artistic blush of love! (smiles) This is soooooo lovely, sweet friend, I'm so happy you joined this special poetic family, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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Kie Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 77USA |
I thank you all for your heart warming welcome. You have been so kind and generous in your comments. Amara, I thank you for the suggestion on the last line, will do. Kie |
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