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Open Poetry #32
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Foxyoasis
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since 2003-06-10
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Atlantic Beach,Fla
0 posted 2004-05-03 09:10 PM


  Gone away for today and tommrow never sorrow
life will end as i know it
don't you cry for me because you
think u owe me
you owe me nothing the blood
I spill is for your eyes
umm yea it needs to be spaced better but I just wrote it lol

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....
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Opeth
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since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543
The Ravines
1 posted 2004-05-04 09:21 PM

I believe this poem has much potential and suggest that you take your time with it... write a couple more drafts until it is ready and repost it. Good luck!
Foxyoasis
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since 2003-06-10
Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla
2 posted 2004-05-04 11:43 PM

thanks

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....
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