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Open Poetry #35

On The Boat

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

0 posted 2005-04-21 10:11 AM

Somewhere to go
Something to do . . .

If it wasn’t you
It’d be someone else . . .
Whatever is here at the hour

And another night
In a hackneyed act
That it really does matter with who . . .

Don’t tell her so
That would be cruel

She likes to think
Each man a fool

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

1 posted 2005-04-21 10:23 AM

perhaps she's had the unfortunate experience, of only knowing fools?

Great poem

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2005-04-21 05:42 PM

Enjoyed...James

yv
Senior Member

since 2003-05-30

Posts 574

3 posted 2005-04-21 05:44 PM

Each man a fool
In his awkward paradise of
Silence and everlasting
Glances from
Illustrious bottom
To
Well-dipping top

I tried my hand at the "fill in the blank" approach to your genius. Again...loved this write.

Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2005-04-21 09:26 PM

nicely done

Drauntz
Member Elite

since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

5 posted 2007-04-30 07:36 PM

I guess that she is right? right?

enjoyed.

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