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Camelot
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Camelot It's hard to breathe here. The air stands heavy; trees hold in the hanging vapors of plowed earth, and the moat stinks through the summer, especially after a siege. Could we have known then, tending our sheep on the fallow downs, how we would live, and what we would now trade for a day of simple sunlight, shining clouds, cold sibilant wind and the distant barking of a dog? RP because someone asked |
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darkling Member
since 2001-08-28
Posts 90altered state of mind |
Have you ever been to Tintagel? The beginning of the poem reminds me of it. Such strong imagery, and precise language. Grr, now I want to go to England all over again. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Lostwithiel, as I remember it, from a long, long time ago.....Restormel Castle, or so I believe -- the memory and the castle match exactly -- but it really doesn't matter. I called the poem Camelot for name recognition, though obviously it's not of the once-and-never-again king. No, I've never been to England in my lifetime. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: To be aware of what it means! How insightful, dear Ratleader. Love, Margherita |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I love the "old world feel" that came across through your words and imagery, Ed. Very nicely penned.  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Obsidian Snow Member
since 2005-08-24
Posts 88 |
Enjoyed the travel. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Much enjoyed this longing piece. hugs, Chris Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed Your imagery is like a paint brush that can go back in time. So well done!  |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Excellent Bravo This is another I want, with your permission, for my collection. It's this moment of beauty and magnificence that all our other no more than five finger exercises are in hopeful anticipation of. Randall Jarrell said that: “A poet is someone who is always standing out in a storm in hopes of being struck by lightning. Should that happen five of six times in his life he is considered a good poet, a dozen or more, a great one.” Again Bravo I hope you weren’t too badly burned. John |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
It's hard to breathe here. The air stands heavy; trees hold in the hanging vapors of plowed earth.... ED~ this is brilliant....and the image of the poem is wonderful, thanks for reposting this.... ~~**~~ |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Absolutely John....you make me proud and humble at the same moment. I've seen those poems of yours, and to think that even a single phrase of mine would be there among them......no words cover that feeling. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
To read this is to slip out of time... your words are so vivid they convey not just a picture... but the sounds and smells... and the gut-wrenching desperation that makes such simple things such important memories. Absolutely superb!! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
hey, leather head, this is a great write! You've transported me to another time and place, and I really really enjoyed the trip! |
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Sharksbean Member
since 2005-09-25
Posts 368jax |
awesome write thanks for sharing -may the force be with you in poetry |
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