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nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

0 posted 2005-10-24 09:50 AM

It's always me, the wanting of,
the bleeding inside for the impossible.
I am a Country Song waiting for completion.
I hear most of me on the radio
driving to nowhere to meet no one,
watching the leaves drop their color,
feeling like those barren trees.

I wake up to peace, darkness inviting now,
spending my thoughts in seclusion,
knowing no one would buy my song.

I miss the me, I should be able to be.

M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

1 posted 2005-10-24 10:39 AM

"I miss the me I should be."

..........................

This is pretty good; there's more
of a universal "I" about it that
make's it exceptional.

Again very good.

John

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2005-10-24 10:39 AM

SweetFriend~
Holding you in thought~

'I am a Country Song waiting for completion'

... you will be sung~
Honest Injun !

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*No matter what I search for ...
let me know when it is LOVE that I find*~ <))><

Email - noles1@totcon.com

JesusChristPose
Senior Member

since 2005-06-21

Posts 777
Pittsburgh, Pa

3 posted 2005-10-24 07:07 PM

I know exactly how you feel.

I hear most of me on the radio
driving to nowhere to meet no one,
watching the leaves drop their color,
feeling like those barren trees.

~ Expressed really well, Maureen. Thanks for sharing.

StevenS
Senior Member

since 2005-09-21

Posts 945
L. A. (Lower Alabama)

4 posted 2005-10-24 08:56 PM

nakedthoughts, I too understand, I often think with ever step forward, I should have taken two. I wonder if that mean's I'm in danger of being perpetualy dissastisfied. I'd buy it!:-)

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2005-10-24 09:11 PM

I understand these thoughts well Maureen..
Well said
Hugs, Nancy

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me.~

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

6 posted 2005-10-24 10:47 PM

"I am a Country Song waiting for completion.
I hear most of me on the radio"

Loved those lines, Maureen. Hey, and, I don't believe "no one would buy" your song, for one minute! Just a matter of patience.....hugs, jo

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

7 posted 2005-10-25 11:37 AM

Glad you enjoyed my thoughts John.

Marge ..oh someday maybe my song will be kept as something special.

back

Mike, always so nice to see and read you. Hope you are well, fellow Pennsylvanian.

StevenS, I think with every forward step, I am knocked back two. I am afraid to go two steps at a time

Thanks

NancyLee, Thanks for being here~~

M

iliana, sometimes patience wears out~~...but I am in no hurry for now.Thanks Jo for the words.

M

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

8 posted 2005-10-26 12:13 PM

Nice writing...James

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

9 posted 2005-10-26 10:30 AM

I would buy your song!!!

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Thomas119gold
Senior Member

since 2002-06-03

Posts 708
Biloxi, MS (city by the sea)

10 posted 2005-10-27 05:55 AM

wonderful piece

Tom

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