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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Obscure Grayness It snowed today Really it was sleet but the desperate called it snow. Fat rain falling into bare branches Pieces of gray falling from a heavy sky And I wondered if clouds cry as the thick drops blended with my tears and slid into obscurity. aziza |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Well, you don't have to get over it (your critique remarks)...I think you have done just fine, a bleak feel, but sleet to me is never something pretty, always a mess. |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Thank you. |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
Oh aziza! You do so have a way with words! Sandra |
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