Effects (taking the challenge)

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Stephanos

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since 2000-07-31

Posts 3618
Statesboro, GA, USA

0 posted 2001-03-31 03:20 PM

Effects

Some explain the world’s effects
by naked natural cause.
Only mindless matter
generating fluxing laws,
atomic science tempered
by the precepts of the mind.
Even thoughts that make us sad
or urge us to be kind,
and keenest of emotions
such as anger, joy or fear
tell of no eternal things,
no Godhead looming near.
They claim such things are chemical,
and so do not demand
a further explanation
and much less a Spirit’s hand
to bring them into being
and sustain them day and night.
But still I beg to differ.
This conception can’t be right.
The world is too complex,
and it’s design is clearly seen.
Her functions give the feeling
that we ride some grand machine.
To view such stately gears
that make our finest seem like toys,
our most renowned inventors
and best scientists but boys,
and say this was an accident
of blind and stumbling force
springing out of nowhere
independent of a source,
is just a foolish fancy
that will crumble from within.
The question won’t be if they’ll see
that he is Lord, but when.
So let their hearts be broken
when they sense his truth and grace,
the effects of which are causing
blinded men to see his face.

3/2001

[This message has been edited by Stephanos (edited 03-31-2001).]

sandgrain
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since 1999-09-21

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Sycamore, IL, USA

1 posted 2001-03-31 05:20 PM

You've covered so much with such great rhythm I almost didn't want it to end. Great work with your unbelievable talent! Rae

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-03-31 07:56 PM

Oh definitely, this went from start to finish so well, I wanted more. Although the last line was magnificent, the bold words as well. It is a reflective piece that made me stop and think for a few seconds before replying.
Great job!
~Allan

The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further"

Joyce Johnson

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since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

3 posted 2001-03-31 08:55 PM

Stephanos your picture makes you look so young to be so wise. How can intelligent men try to tell us that this compex world came about without a plan. Good work and I loved it. Joyce

Stephanos

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since 2000-07-31

Posts 3618
Statesboro, GA, USA

4 posted 2001-03-31 09:55 PM

Thanks for all your replies,

I'm glad you all enjoyed this.
As to the rhythm, I changed "marvelous" which seemed to throw off the rhythm in line 25 to "stately". This works a bit better I think.

Stephen.

ellie LeJeune
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since 2000-01-10

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King of Prussia, PA USA

5 posted 2001-03-31 10:18 PM

Stephen; I, too, am in awe at your wisdom and tremendous gift of poetry. This is epic in proportions, filled with all the wisdom God has granted us through the ages..how can so many, be so blind? Ellie

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22

Posts 9245
Illinois

6 posted 2001-04-01 10:08 PM

I have to admit it went through my mind too, wow he's so young and has all this wisdom?

You've written this very well. Loaded with truth, and I love the 'toy' part.

*applause* excellent work!

It reminds me of a statement:
Big bang theory....God spoke, (BANG) it happened. LOL

[This message has been edited by WhtDove (edited 04-01-2001).]

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