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firejerm
Member

since 2000-06-13

Posts 217
Springfield, OH, good ol USA

0 posted 2001-01-17 10:17 PM

Darkness settles against me
For it does not heed,
These ancient walls wounded
As their cracks begin to bleed.
A musty smell teases nausea
The bulge in my throat grows,
Heavy footsteps to the unknown
Stopping where nobody knows.
A painful scream beckons me
Somewhere in the black distance,
Yet when I try to run to help her
I'm met with invisible resistance.
Pleading they are for its mercy
Of what, though, escapes me,
The screams dwindle to moans
And the mystery befuddles me.
A scent of death greets me
Accompanied with iron must be blood,
I coldn't get to her dying
I would have if I could.
Silent breath pounds my ears
As my heart begins to race,
There's a hooded man evil
Below him the outline of a face.
The salt of tears I taste
Is it from her or are they mine?
Damn this darkness to hell
For it has left me blind.
I can still hear it beating
Surly she's been torn apart,
Beaten, violated, stripped of dignity
I can still sense her heart.
Suddenly silence so frightening
Can't wake from this dream but why?
Choking the words "please help me"
The the outline fades and dies.

Jeremy T. Sellers
1/17/01
9:51 PM

"Those little slices of death, how I loathe them."
-Edgar Allen Poe

Fallen Angel of Darkness
Junior Member

since 2001-01-17

Posts 26
Among the Shadows

1 posted 2001-01-18 01:26 AM

Firejerm,

Wow. This is a dark poem. A perfect piece of macabre. Judging by the title, I am assuming it was a dream you had...Have you looked into the possible symbolism that could be in it?

It was nicely done. Great job.

~* Megs *~ the Disheartened Fallen Angel

"Those who are faithful know only the trivial side of love: it is the faithless who know love's tragedies." Oscar Wilde

*~* Just because someon

Dark_kisses_Within
Senior Member

since 2000-03-21

Posts 680
Kansas

2 posted 2001-01-18 08:39 AM

Very good job, Jeremy! *shivers* Makes me NOT want to go back to bed.

Your poetry is getting more and more towards the darkened side.... I like it! But yet I enjoy your *love* poems just as well. Great work!

Love,
Mags

No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry

K2001
Junior Member

since 2001-01-19

Posts 31
Near manchester in England

3 posted 2001-01-19 03:11 AM

Wow! Wow! and Wow! This was fantastic!! Looking forward to seeing more!!

*K*

Verve
Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 348
Singapore

4 posted 2001-01-19 01:50 PM

Whoa ... This is quite incredible ... I haven't read anything so dark for quite a while.
Great imagery you have here. Very nicely done.

cheers.

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

5 posted 2001-01-19 04:28 PM

Nicely written ..i love reading dark..my kind of poem

~V~

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)

bluebrdy65
Member

since 2000-05-16

Posts 276
Gladys,

6 posted 2001-01-20 08:47 PM

Jeremy this was outstanding
I was glued to the screen
bravo bravo
wonderful Job
but I dont want this kind of dream
Jane

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