I saw her today -- she's changed

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Open Poetry #38

I saw her today -- she's changed

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since 2006-04-29

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0 posted 2006-05-23 05:04 PM

I saw her today –
she’s changed,
the ash
of a long forgotten cigarette.

she thought
that I ran out
because she ran out
of money,
because she ran out
of body,

but I’m not
the kind of egomaniac
that likes to say no;

I’m the kind
that has to;

but today,
her face
was beyond embers
and through
the smoke
of change,
I saw
that I
had done to love
what acid
did to rain.

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Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

1 posted 2006-05-23 05:31 PM

oh, what a heartache
well written though

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

2 posted 2006-05-23 05:41 PM

Yes, an excellent poem, your lines fit well.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2006-05-23 05:59 PM

brutal, in such a sad way...well done

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

4 posted 2006-05-23 09:43 PM

"I saw
that I
had done to love
what acid
did to rain."
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Beautifully bitter to read....powerful ending!

Keeping this one too....Yet again, when did you write it?!

Melissa~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

WindWalker
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since 2001-10-12

Posts 1218

5 posted 2006-05-25 10:39 AM

This is a heartache, but like Midnitesun says, it is well written!!!!!!!!!!

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